Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.

Week 12  ID: 410309379                 Name: Yifi

Writing topic:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

 Your essay ( 356 words) start here and please underline the topic sentences in the introduction and in the body paragraph:

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Some people thinks that once we have money, we have everything; some people said that money can’t buy everything like happiness and love or what. In my opinion, I think that only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Because if we have plenty of money, we’ll be able to buy whatever you like. There are three aspects I think the most important and main advantages of the statement.

First, with money, I can buy any clothes I want to buy and don’t need to care about the prices. And I can buy a big and comfortable house. I can design my house in my own idea. I really wonder to do that. I want to design my rooms, my walls and even the whole building. I think it is very important. And the other side, I can buy a safe and cool car. I can also have a humorous car driver. I will buy the things I think instead of luxuries.

And the second,to do something good to this world. If you are a good guy and you have so much money now, I'm pretty sure that you will use it to do good things. Such as giving some of the money to charity organizations, helping your local hospitals and schools...And even more, you can give some changes or bills to the poor beggar on the street. It’s time to give many good lucks to the poor when you are rich now.

And the last,to entertainment. If I have a lot of money I can buy all my idol’s albums and don’t care about the prices. I wants to buy all of them. And also, I can buy all 3C products I want to buy. I can buy all video games and play them until I become an old guy. And the most important, if I have plenty of money, I can buy all toys I want. I will love them so much. I will in the cute and lovely toy world whole days and whole life.

All I want to say is that I think money is everything.
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Revised

Some people thinks that once we have money, we have everything; some people said that money can’t buy everything like happiness and love or what. In my opinion, I think that only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Because if we have plenty of money, we’ll be able to buy whatever you like. So I think money is everything. There are three aspects I think the most important and main advantages of the statement.

First,with money, I can buy any clothes I want to buy and don’t need to care about the prices. And I can buy a big and comfortable house. I can design my house in my own idea. I really wonder to do that. I want to design my rooms, my walls and even the whole building. I think it is very important. And furthermore, I can buy a safe and cool car. I can also have a humorous car driver. I will buy the things I think instead of luxuries.

And the second, with money, I can do many good things to this world. If you are a good guy and you have so much money now, I'm pretty sure that you will use it to do good things. Such as giving some of the money to charity organizations, helping your local hospitals and schools...And even more, you can give some changes or bills to the poor beggar on the street. It’s time to give many good lucks to the poor when you are rich now.

And the last,  with money, I can enjoy every kinds of entertainment. If I have a lot of money I can buy all my idol’s albums and don’t care about the prices. I wants to buy all of them. And also, I can buy all 3C products I want to buy. I can buy all video games and play them until I become an old guy. And the most important, if I have plenty of money, I can buy all toys I want. I will love them so much. I will in the cute and lovely toy world whole days and whole life.

To sum up, I think money is everything.
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Reflection
I have learned that money can buy many things.